RPC Authority

Tab 4. Decided I try and work up on old projects and get them finished.

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RPC-XXX must be used sparingly however, as any all attempts to replicate the drug has have been met with failure.

Initial testing showed that ingestion of the pills did not cause any beneficiary beneficial or detrimental effects for the test subject until Incident-XXX-01 in which a CSD class was terminated during a containment breach.

A beneficiary is a person who benefits.

RPC-XXX does not contain any viral culture or chemical composition of any kind. Any substances that are present within the anomalies objects are unknown.

This one is more of a nitpick, as anomalies works fine.

Attempts to break down and study the contents of the anomalies revealed the pills to be empty, and have led to the pills losing their color.

CSD-0141 was incapable of describe describing his experience since his death and revival.

It should be noted that RPC-XXX has a one-time use. can only be used once.

I really like this article. It's short, sweet, and a really interesting object. If you want to expand it at all, you could add the list of people who have used the object, maybe a number of global directors or POIs. However, that is up to you.

As is, I find this article to be very interesting, and can see it being used as a very useful tool for the Authority.

Good work.

I haven't noticed any mistakes other than what has been mentioned above so I have nothing to say in that department.

What I will say is that despite its brevity this article is really entertaining and satisfying. The idea is interesting and it makes me wonder how this RPC will be used in the future, I believe this could be included as part of cross-testing logs as well as seeing use on dangerous expeditions. This opens up a lot of ideas considering that all the RPCs exist in the same canon.

I do believe this is good enough for posting. Bravo.

don't forget to put this in rpc format (with object class image) before posting

i'm going to be correcting grammar in bolded text by the way

RPC-XXX is to be kept in a standard containment storage in Site-15.

what's a standard containment storage? isn't it called a containment chamber? and, it's site-015

For experimentation or emergency purposes, high ranking personnel with a security clearance of 4 and 5 are to have access to RPC-XXX.

wouldn't they already? why is this an emergency procedure?

Unauthorized use of RPC-XXX to increase a person's lifespan will result in a demotion to CSD status.

remove the "a" before demotion, and, what? wouldn't they just be kicked out of the authority or terminated? why CSD status? isn't that dangerous?

Ensure a request form is filed out to site director via submission packet for permission to use RPC-XXX.

site director who? and, all you have to do is fill out a form? what if there's a malthus spy, you just gave them more life because they wrote "yes" on a coupon

RPC-XXX must be used sparingly however, as all attempts to replicate the drug have been met with failure.

then why is this for everyone who can submit a form? these are two very conflicting statements

RPC-XXX is a series of orange florescent colored pills.

perhaps reword this to "RPC-XXX is a collection of florescent pills with orange pigmentation."

At the time of discovery, there were sixty-seven pills. Initial testing showed that ingestion of the pills did not cause any beneficial or detrimental effects for the test subject until Incident-XXX-01 in which a CSD class was terminated during a containment breach.

if there were only 67, why would they test it on CSD? and how many times did they test it? how do they have enough left over for personnel to use them?

RPC-XXX does not contain any viral culture or chemical composition of any kind.

i think "viral culture" might be the wrong wording for pills

and, no chemical composition OF ANY KIND? so it's literally made of antimatter?

Any substances that are present within the anomalies are unknown.

ignoring how stilted this wording is, so there is a chemical composition?

Attempts to break down and study the contents of the objects revealed the pills were empty, and have lost their color.

so they give CSD these things, give researchers them, and cut them up. how many do they have left?

Upon a subject's death, their body will spontaneously combust and proceed to burn for several minutes until they are reduced to ash.

how intense is the heat?

After a period of thirty seconds, the subject will manifest from the ash pile.

woah, thats a big point to make in a single short line

Subjects will have no recollection of events between the time of death and revival period. Subjects with medical and mental issues will revive without any of their illnesses.

so it cures illness too? is there any downside to these things?

Subjects over the age of seventy will revive and appear biologically younger than their chronological age.

how many times did they test these? do they have like 2 pills left?

PC-XXX has been accepted for future cross-testing purposes that are of high priority.

wHAT? why would you give anomalies IMMORTALITY PILLS? what if you made a monster IMMORTAL?

Request: One instance of RPC-XXX to test if the anomaly would have an effect while in possession of RPC-162.

Approved: Don't waste it Dr. Silar.

what? why on earth would you approve that? what if the researcher dies and only the anomaly revives? or vice versa? this sounds way too risky

overall this is a fine idea but its not particularly well written, it's jumbled all over the place, and the cross testing logs make it look like a bad SCP series 1 article before the article purge.

Okay, so I'm guessing immortality pills or something?

Item#: RPC-XXX

Object Class: Theta-White

Where them hazards, man?

Containment Protocols: RPC-XXX is to be kept in a standard containment storage unit? Locker? case? in on Site-015. For experimentation or emergency purposes, high-ranking personnel with a security clearance Level of 4 or 5 are to have access to RPC-XXX. Unauthorized use of RPC-XXX to increase a person's lifespan will result in a demotion to CSD status. Ensure a request form is filed out to site director via submission packet for permission to use RPC-XXX. RPC-XXX must be used sparingly however, as all attempts to replicate the drug have been met with failure. I don't think this last sentence belongs in Containment. Fit it in the Description somehow.

Description: RPC-XXX is a series of translucent, fluorescent orangeorange-florescent colored pills. At the time of discovery when? You don't really talk discovery here., there were 77 pills in total. Initial testing showed that ingestion of the pills did not cause any beneficial or detrimental effects for the test subject until Incident-XXX-01, in which a CSD class was terminated during a containment breach.¹ You're making it sound like the Authority found some random pills and fed them to a CSD to see what happened. Give us more context- how would they know these aren't just, like… sinus medication or laxatives or something? What kind of container were they in? Where were they found? Anything!

While RPC-XXX does not contain any viral culture or chemical composition of any kind. Any substances that are present within the anomalies cannot be determined. Attempts to break down and study the contents of the pill results in a miniaturized combustion. Do you mean the pill catches fire? In that case, shouldn't it be something like "Attempts to mechanically disassemble the pill or its contents results in a spontaneous combustion reaction which destroys the pill."

Upon the death of a subject who has consumed a pill,##a subject's death, their body will spontaneously combust and proceed to burn for several minutes until they are reduced to ash. red|Mention temperatures here. The degree of heat needed to turn a skeleton to ash is considerable, and would have damaging effects on the area around it.a new instance of the subject will manifest from the ash pile in the same physical and mental condition as they were before their death. The subject will have no recollection of events between the time of death and revival period. Any subject with medical and mental illnesses will re-materialize without any of their prior conditions after death. Subjects who die over the age of seventy will revive and appear biologically younger rather than their chronological age. RPC-XXX has been accepted for future cross-testing purposes that are of high priority.

Incident-XXX-01:
CSD-0141, one of the test subjects who was administered with RPC-XXX, died during the containment breach of RPC-[REDACTED] On what site? On what day? Under what circumstances?. CSD-0141 was incapable of describing his experience since his death and revival. CSD-0141 was given another pill and was given temporary relief relief from what? until further testing. It should be noted that RPC-XXX can only be used once. When administered with another instance of RPC-XXX, CSD-0141 was terminated Terminated implied someone killed them, rather than them dying- is this what you mean? after an accident in the handling of RPC-[REDACTED]

Request Forms-XXX-01:

Packet: 01
Subject: Dr. Silar
Request: One instance of RPC-XXX to test if the anomaly would have an effect while in possession of RPC-162 should Dr. Silar perishes.

Approved: Just don't waste your second life Dr. Silar.

Packet: 02:
Subject: Dr. Kale
Request: One instance of RPC-XXX to cross test on a subject afflicted by the residue left by RPC-301. The purpose of the test is to determine if subjects will retain their ability to perceive sound after death and resurrection.

Approved: Recommend you use a CSD exposed to 301 instead of the infected civilians. Do a full molecular reading after they re-materialize.

Packet 03:
Subject: Dr. Apth
Request: One instance of RPC-XXX to lead Site-11's expedition to [REDACTED]
How does a pill lead an expedition?
Denied: You're more use to the Occult Department here than you are out there Apth. We have another to take your place.

Okay. I see what you're doing here, and the idea is solid, but I think this needs more. Resurrection/immortality drugs are one of those things you can play 100% straight that will still be interesting, because of the ethical and moral implications- maybe explore how the people who came back feel about all this? Also, again, this needs a discovery log, or something digging more into the backstory of these damn pills.

The documents detailed the locations and research papers of unofficial research facilities, including [REDACTED] Labs add comma where RPC-XXX was recovered.

Know Now that you've died… and come back to life… how does that make you feel?

Know works as well, but I would change it to You know, but that's just me.

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I don't know why you haven't posted this yet. This is a great article. It's well rounded, fleshed out, and very interesting. Plus there's very few errors. Go ahead and post this.

Good work.