Star Marbles
My first attempt at an article.
http://rpcsandbox.wikidot.com/thedeathofsanic
Any and all advice is welcome, since I have no idea what I'm doing.
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RPC-XXX-1, when directly viewed, creates a compulsion to purchase RPC-XXX consistent with Amazing! Co. products, and then open RPC-XXX-1 and handle RPC-XXX-2 irregardless regardless of warning or knowledge of RPC-XXX-2’s anomalous effects.
The only reason I bring this up is for the fact that irregardless seems to be more slang than an official word, and, since this is an in-universe official document, I don't think it would be used.
Source: https://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/irregardless
Admittedly, this is a nitpick, but I digress.
RPC-XXX-2 instances measure █ cm in diameter, and weigh 5.5 grams, and correspond to a Mohs hardness rating of 5.5.
The size of RPC-XXX-3 instances varies based on the amount of RPC-XXX-2 that has progressed to this stage, and can measure between 2 cm and ████
How big are we talking? is the redacted in cm or meters or even bigger? I understand you want to redact this, but at least give us the unit of measurement so we can understand just how big this thing can get.
RPC-XXX was discovered on 4/25/19██ following an incident in the local ███████ supermarket in ████, Mississippi, when RPC-XXX-1 was breached and RPC-XXX-2 was handled, resulting in 42 casualties and 21 deaths.
Bit of a run on sentence, but it should be fine. Also causalities usually refer to deaths, but they apparently can be used for injuries, though it's mostly for military personnel. I would personally just use injuries, but casualties is fine.
RPC-XXX’s latent anomalous properties were discovered after a member of X-Ray-6-1 accidentally nudged an instance of RPC-XXX-2 with their boot, resulting in 2 more casualties.
That or just say:
RPC-XXX’s latent anomalous properties were discovered after X-Ray-6-1 accidentally nudged an instance of RPC-XXX-2 with their boot, resulting in 2 more casualties.
TESTING LOG XXX-01
There's nothing wrong with this, but it could be better if you put these in a quotation box. You do this by putting a > and a space before a line, if you weren't aware. You also need the > for empty lines as well.
So it would look like this:
TESTING LOG XXX-01
Date: 5/2/19██ Time: 08:00
Objective: Discover the exact events required to trigger RPC-XXX-2’s effects.
Subject: CSD-1172. Subject was given appropriate anti-memetic treatment prior to test.
Instruction: CSD-1172 was instructed to jostle an intact instance of RPC-XXX-1 without opening the bag.
Result: RPC-XXX-2 remained inert despite moving within the confines of RPC-XXX-1.
Subject: One (1) Unmanned ground vehicle (UGV) equipped with video and audio recording hardware, and equipped with a single claw for handling objects.
I like how you start using unmanned drones for this object, so as to avoid it becoming a meat grinder RPC.
The loss of three enclosures and one of our unmanned vehicles is unacceptable.
This would absolutely happen, good work addressing it.
The resulting temperatures and sudden gravitational shift damaged or destroyed eastern areas of Site-11.
I'm no astrologist, but wouldn't a supernova event on surface level cause a lot more damage? Even if it was a small one?
This is one of the better article drafts I have read in a while. You have clearly done your research and your clinical tone is second to none. I also really like the idea you've put here and how you have presented it. It's simple to understand, but very interesting. I only noticed a few minor things, but otherwise, I think you've got a really solid article here.
Good work.
"Starbles" is still a better name and nothing you can say will change my mind
Registered Phenomena Code: RPC-XXX
Object Class: Alpha-Yellow Alpha-Black
Hazard Types: Grouped Hazard, Ballistic Hazard, Transmutable Hazard, Extreme Temperatures, Gravitational Hazard, Cognito Hazard.
Containment Procedures:
—Instances of RPC-XXX are to be stored within standard Alpha secure containers until testing. Any damage to RPC-XXX-1 is to be reported to Site-█. Site names are always three digits! Also, redacting containment information makes no sense- how do you contain this if you don't know where it is? Motion sensors where? are to be monitored by assigned personnel in shifts of 4 hours, and cycled accordingly. Inspection of motion sensors must occur every 90 days. Motion sensors must be replaced every 360 days. Wait, so they're replaced yearly minue five days? I'm confused. Damage, malfunction, or other issues are to be immediately reported to Site-011 Director Klaus ███████.
In event of a containment breach, Site-█ is to be locked down and local ASF units in heavy protective gear are to verify that RPC-XXX-2 has ceased motion. Upon verification that RPC-XXX-2 has ceased movement, RPC-XXX-2 fragments are to be destroyed by manner of caustic spray define caustic spray in this case. What chemical(s) do they use? Like, you could argue that vinegar is a caustic spray..—
Instances of RPC-XXX-1 are to be kept separated from other instances of RPC-XXX-1. RPC-XXX-1 instances are not to be handled and are to be individually stored in standard Alpha secure containers. Individual containers are to be fitted with motion sensors. Monitoring of motion sensors is to be carried out by assigned personnel in shifts of 4 hours, and cycled accordingly.
In event of containment breach, Site-█ is to activate localized thermobaric charges within RPC-XXX's containment area. On-Site ASF units are to verify destruction of RPC-XXX. If multiple RPC-XXX-2 instances complete transformation into RPC-XXX-4b, an end-of-the-world scenario is to be considered likely and protocol Epsilon-Victor-Epsilon you should 100% explain what this is in the Containment, because it's something that all staff working on this sucker need to know is to be activated effective immediately.
Monitoring of ███████ supermarkets is to be carried out by Site-█, with all instances of RPC-XXX to be recalled. Any retailer questioning the recall is to be given an alibi concerning damaged marbles.
In the event of RPC-XXX being purchased before proper containment can be enacted, MST X-Ray-6 ('Annulifiers’) are to locate and retrieve RPC-XXX. Should RPC-XXX-2 be handled, MST X-Ray-6 are to activate a localized [REDACTED]. DON'T REDACT CONTAINMENT PROCEDURES. This section represents life-or-death info, so it should be as clear as possible
Description:
RPC-XXX is divided into two four objects, identified as RPC-XXX-1, and RPC-XXX-2. RPC-XXX-1, RPC-XXX-2, RPC-XXX-3, and RPC-XXX-4. RPC-XXX-4 is further broken down into RPC-XXX-4a and RPC-XXX-4b.
RPC-XXX-1 is a plastic resealable bag containing 25-30 instances of RPC-XXX-2. The bag is labeled as standard Hasbro brand marbles, with large print reading “Amazing! Co. Star Marbles”. RPC-XXX-1 is always marked at $0.99 USD. Markings consistent with the Amazing! Co. Group of InterestGoI are present on both sides of the bag.
The mailing information has been replaced with a disclaimer written in fine print.
Amazed co is don't responsibrue I would add a [sic] in here somewhereof anytime lost for alive or property due to used the for star marbles
RPC-XXX-1 has no anomalous properties unless holding instances of RPC-XXX-2, or if being directly viewed by who? Can an animal view it? What about cameras? What about mirrors?. When RPC-XXX-1 comes into contact with RPC-XXX-2, RPC-XXX-2 will not manifest anomalous properties and will remain inert until removed from RPC-XXX-1 or RPC-XXX-1 is damaged. RPC-XXX-1, when directly viewed, creates a compulsion to purchase RPC-XXX consistent with Amazing! Co. products, and then open RPC-XXX-1 and handle RPC-XXX-2 irregardless of warning or knowledge of RPC-XXX-2’s anomalous effects.
RPC-XXX-2 refers to 25-30 this is already a collective designation, no need to specify numbers glass marbles painted to resemble known astronomical bodies within the solar system. RPC-XXX-2 instances measure █ cm in diameter, and weigh 5.5 grams, and correspond to a Mohs hardness rating of 5.5. When RPC-XXX-2 is removed from RPC-XXX-1, RPC-XXX-2 will manifest its anomalous properties. RPC-XXX-2 instances, when thrown or rolled, ignore friction and continue to gain speed even if contact is made with another object. RPC-XXX-2 will usually shatter upon reaching a speed of 30 m/s. Fragments of RPC-XXX-2 will then embed in soft objects and cease movement. Fragments of RPC-XXX-2 will then embed in soft objects, but will continue to shatter otherwise. Further breaking down of the material eventually creates a coarse powder that continues to accelerate at an exponentially increasing speed. Coming into contact with the powder via skin, or inhalation is invariably fatal due to the speed at which the particles within are moving.
RPC-XXX-2 instances that continue to fragment are then identified as RPC-XXX-3. RPC-XXX-3 refers to a cloud of RPC-XXX-2 fragments that behaves in a manner similarly to stellar nebulae. The size of RPC-XXX-3 instances varies based on the amount of RPC-XXX-2 that has progressed to this stage, and can measure between 2 cm and ████ specify dimensions here. Is this a measurement of radius? Diameter? Cubic space?. RPC-XXX-3 instances then heat up to a temperature of 10,000° K within ██ seconds. RPC-XXX-3 will then form miniature T-Tauri footnotes explaining this terminology, please. It's been a long time since I learned stellar formationstars which undergo rapid stellar evolution, quickly progressing to main-sequence. RPC-XXX-3 instances that progress to this stage are identified as RPC-XXX-4.
You have a bunch of unnecessary double spaces between lines for some reason
RPC-XXX-4 measures between 0.3 and 1 cm again, in what? Diameter? Radius?. Temperature and luminosity of RPC-XXX-4 cannot be recorded due to the destructive nature of RPC-XXX-4. But if these things are stars it should be super easy to just point an infrared camera at them from far away, no? RPC-XXX-4 will begin nuclear fusion and continue to move erratically. RPC-XXX-4 quickly forms and depletes its outer layers of hydrogen, forming a core of denser materials until the star eventually collapses. RPC-XXX-4a refers to any instance of RPC-XXX-4 that undergoes a supernova event, quickly expelling all of its mass. RPC-XXX-4a is then considered neutralized with leftover superheated particles showing no anomalous movement or increase in speed.
break up this paragraph
RPC-XXX4b refers to an instance of RPC-XXX-4 that crosses its Schwartzchild Radius again, footnotes explaining terminology are always good and becomes a miniature black hole. RPC-XXX-4b is theorized to have an event horizon of 0.000001 µm, but due to the nature of its transformation and speed this cannot be confirmed. RPC-XXX-4b continues to move erratically, absorbing matter over the course of 10 seconds until it ‘vaporizes’ and is considered neutralized. See Addendum XXX-01 for more information.
Discovery:
RPC-XXX was discovered on 4/25/19██ following an incident in the local ███████ supermarket in ████, Mississippi, when RPC-XXX-1 was breached and RPC-XXX-2 was handled, resulting in 42 casualties and 21 deaths. MST X-Ray-6 (‘Annulifiers’) were dispatched to the location following the deaths of 2 Authority informants and the news coverage of the event. RPC-XXX’s latent anomalous properties were discovered after X-Ray-6-1 accidentally nudged an instance of RPC-XXX-2 with their boot, resulting in 2 more casualties. After visual confirmation of Amazing! Co. GoI markings and confirmation of associated cognitohazards, MST X-Ray-6 applied memetics to the entire township of ████ and distributed standard wide-area-coverage amnestics via aerosol dispersal to the entirety of Forrest County. It seems odd that you mention the county name at the end of the paragraph, and not at the beginning
TESTING LOG XXX-01
Date: 5/2/19██ Time: 08:00
Objective: Discover the exact events required to trigger RPC-XXX-2’s effects.
Subject: D-1172. Subject was given appropriate anti-memetic treatment prior to test.
Instruction: D-1172 was instructed to jostle an intact instance of RPC-XXX-1 without opening the bag.
Result: RPC-XXX-2 remained inert despite moving within the confines of RPC-XXX-1.
TESTING LOG XXX-02
Date: 5/9/19██ Time: 08:00
Objective: Discover the exact events required to trigger RPC-XXX-2’s effects.
Subject: D-2153. Subject was not given any anti memetic effect.
Instruction: D-2153 was instructed to handle and open RPC-XXX-1, and handle RPC-XXX-2.
Result: As soon as D-2153 made visual contact with RPC-XXX-1, subject displayed eagerness to open RPC-XXX-1 and handle RPC-XXX-2. Upon handling RPC-XXX-2, D-2153 attempted to start a game of marbles. As soon as an instance of RPC-XXX-2 left D-2153’s hand, the instance immediately began rolling despite a lack of assistance from D-2153’s hand. After 1 minute and 12 seconds had elapsed, the instance of RPC-XXX-2 had reached a recorded speed of 30 m/s and shattered upon hitting the wall of the enclosure. Fragments of RPC-XXX-2 then continued to bounce off of the walls of the enclosure, causing damage to RPC-XXX-1 and harming D-2153 through multiple lacerations. After 1 minute and 53 seconds, all RPC-XXX-2 instances had been freed from the bag due to the damage caused by the initial RPC-XXX-2 fragments. D-2153 was then presumed dead. Test was terminated after RPC-XXX-2 fragments destroyed all recording hardware and damaged the reinforced glass of the observation room. RPC-XXX-1 and RPC-XXX-2 were destroyed via application of caustic spray.
TESTING LOG XXX-03
Date: 6/9/19██ Time: 08:00
Objective: Discover the exact events required to trigger RPC-XXX-2’s effects.
Subject: One (1) Unmanned ground vehicle (UGV) equipped with video and audio recording hardware, and equipped with a single claw for handling objects.
Instruction: Unmanned ground vehicle (UGV) was operated by Researcher Dr. Young. Dr. Young was instructed to open RPC-XXX-1 and handle RPC-XXX-2.
Result: Umanned ground vehicle was inserted into a reinforced testing enclosure and handled the RPC-XXX-1 instance that had been placed prior. After successfully opening RPC-XXX-1, RPC-XXX-2 manifested its anomalous properties and began moving. Due to the unmanned ground vehicle lacking the reaction time and dexterity possessed by living beings, Dr. Young was unable to stop RPC-XXX-2’s movement. Testing was terminated after 2 minutes and 5 seconds, where RPC-XXX-2 had fragmented and damaged the unmanned ground vehicle’s recording suite.
Researcher’s Notes: “Interesting. It appears that RPC-XXX-2 responds to any movement outside of RPC-XXX-1. It appears that once RPC-XXX-1 is breached, it causes a cascade event.” -Dr Young.
TESTING LOG XXX-04
Date: 6/16/19██ Time: 08:00
Objective: Discover RPC-XXX-2’s limits.
Instruction: RPC-XXX-1 is to be breached, and no less than one (1) instance of RPC-XXX-2 is to be removed via application of robotic appendage equipped with slip-resistant material. RPC-XXX-1 and remaining RPC-XXX-2 instances are to be destroyed via caustic spray to reduce damage. Remaining RPC-XXX-2 instance is then to be dropped and robotic appendage is to be withdrawn. Cameras and recording equipment are to be reinforced.
Site Director’s Notes: “I appreciate your willingness to continue testing of RPC-XXX, but due to the destructive nature of this anomaly I am asking you limit all testing to 1-5 instances. The loss of three enclosures and one of our umanned vehicles is unacceptable. I do not need to remind you that we do not fully understand RPC-XXX yet and complications that arise from testing, that could destroy the site, are far too likely using all instances.” -Site Director Klaus ███████
Result: RPC-XXX-2 instance was successfully extracted from RPC-XXX-1. RPC-XXX-1 and remaining instances were destroyed via caustic spray as per instruction. At 5 minutes and 30 seconds post application of caustic spray, RPC-XXX-2 instance was then dropped and appendage withdrawn. The instance began to move erratically and shatter after reaching 30 m/s, at 7 minutes and 18 seconds. RPC-XXX-2 continued to fragment until it reached a powder-like state at 8 minutes and 3 seconds. Temperature sensors detected an increase in testing enclosure that exponentially increased with acceleration of RPC-XXX-2 powder.
RPC-XXX-2 was then observed to behave similarly to stellar nebulae. During this time, particles of RPC-XXX-2 (given the designation of RPC-XXX-3) were observed to begin forming a T-Tauri class star at 10 minutes and 43 seconds. RPC-XXX-3 instance then progressed to a main sequence star at 12 minutes and 4 seconds, with a theorized classification of K. RPC-XXX-3 was then designated RPC-XXX-4.
RPC-XXX-4 quickly consumed all of its outer layers and formed a dense core at 15 minutes and 3 seconds. Visual and audio recording equipment failed at this time due to extreme damage caused by RPC-XXX-4.
At 17 minutes and 3 seconds, RPC-XXX-4 [DATA EXPUNGED], resulting in the destruction of Site-11’s east wing and 9 instances of containment breach. See Addendum XXX-01 for more information.
Honestly, I would cut out several or all of these test logs. I don't think they add much.
Addendum-XXX-01
During Testing of RPC-XXX on 6/16/19██, RPC-XXX-4 underwent a supernova event. The resulting temperatures and sudden gravitational shift damaged or destroyed eastern areas of Site-11. RPC-XXX-4 appears to behave consistently with current stellar bodies, and is theorized to become a miniature black hole should multiple instances of RPC-XXX-2 contribute mass to RPC-XXX-3, then RPC-XXX-4. Classification has been raised to Black, and new containment procedures are to be put in place effective immediately. Testing is halted until further notice.
-Global Director ███
Okay! Overall, this is a solid draft of a serviceable first article! Your tone is decent, your flow and ideas are internally consistent, but I feel like it's a bit too long. I would shorten the test logs, find a good photo and then I think you're set.
I like the main idea you've come up with, but I think there are a number of changes you could make. Also there is a big chunk in the middle I didnt day anything about b/c I read Von Pincier's crit and pretty much agree with all of his points
Registered Phenomena Code: RPC-XXX
Object Class: Alpha-Yellow Alpha-Black Why is this Alpha Black? it isn't easy to contain, especially now that the authority accidentally created a bunch of the tiny stars
Hazard Types: Grouped Hazard, Ballistic Hazard, Transmutable Hazard, Extreme Temperatures, Gravitational Hazard, Cognito Hazard. This is not a cognitohazard. It is a memetic/visual hazard, but there is no cognitohazard in the hazards and this requires you to see the object to be affected
Containment Procedures:
—Instances of RPC-XXX-1 are to be stored within standard Alpha secure containers until testing. Any damage to RPC-XXX-1 is to be reported to Site-█.Why is the site redacted?! Every person who damages a -1 instance will look to these protocols and see that the site they need to report to has been struck from the record, and now they can't control the mini-black holes. I would also change it from 1 specific site to the nearest level-4 or 5 personnel. Motion sensors are to be monitored by assigned personnel in shifts of 4 hours, and cycled accordingly. Inspection of motion sensors must occur every 90 days. Motion sensors must be replaced every 360 days. Damage, malfunction, or other issues are to be immediately reported to Site-11 Director Klaus ███████. If we know the marbles don't turn into stars while there in the bag, why do we need all of these motion sensors, and all this upkeep for the sensors? Why do we need to report all of these issues instead of just fixing them? Why do we need to report it all to one person?
In event of a containment breach, Site-█ is to be locked down and local ASF units in heavy protective gear are to verify that RPC-XXX-2 has ceased motion. Upon verification that RPC-XXX-2 has ceased movement, RPC-XXX-2 fragments are to be destroyed by manner of caustic spray.—
Instances of RPC-XXX-1 are to be kept separate from other instances of RPC-XXX-1. RPC-XXX-1 instances are not to be handled and are to be individually stored in standard Alpha secure containers. Individual containers are to be fitted with motion sensors. Monitoring of motion sensors is to be carried out by assigned personnel in shifts of 4 hours, and cycled accordingly. This needs to be put before the second paragraph, or else the reader is just bombarded with the motion sensor spiel
In event of containment breach, Site-█ is to activate localized thermobaric charges within RPC-XXX's containment area. Localized ASF units are to verify destruction of RPC-XXX. If multiple RPC-XXX-2 instances complete transformation into RPC-XXX-4b, an end-of-the-world scenario is to be considered likely and protocol Epsilon-Victor-Epsilon is to be activated effective immediately.
Monitoring of ███████ supermarkets is to be carried out by Site-█, with all instances of RPC-XXX to be recalled. Any retailer questioning the recall is to be given an alibi concerning damaged marbles.
In the event of RPC-XXX being purchased before proper containment can be enacted, MST X-Ray-6 ('Annulifiers’) are to locate and retrieve RPC-XXX. Should RPC-XXX-2 be handled, MST X-Ray-6 are to activate a localized [REDACTED].
Description:
RPC-XXX is divided into two four objects, identified as RPC-XXX-1, and RPC-XXX-2. RPC-XXX-1, RPC-XXX-2, RPC-XXX-3, and RPC-XXX-4. RPC-XXX-4 is further broken down into RPC-XXX-4a and RPC-XXX-4b.
RPC-XXX-1 is a plastic resealable bag containing 25-30 instances of RPC-XXX-2. The bag is labeled as standard Hasbro brand marbles, with large print reading “Amazing! Co. Star Marbles”. Okay, I will admit that I dunno much about Amazing! Co. but I think that the bags would either be labeled as Amazing! Co. marbles or as Hasbro brand marbles RPC-XXX-1 is always marked at $0.99 USD. Markings consistent with the Amazing! Co. GoI are present on both sides of the bag.
The mailing information has been replaced with a disclaimer written in fine print.
Amazed co is don't responsibrue of anytime lost for alive or property due to used the for star marbles
RPC-XXX-1 has no anomalous properties unless holding instances of RPC-XXX-2, or if being directly viewed. When RPC-XXX-1 comes into contact with RPC-XXX-2, RPC-XXX-2 will not manifest anomalous properties and will remain inert until removed from RPC-XXX-1 or RPC-XXX-1 is damaged. RPC-XXX-1, when directly viewed, creates a compulsion to purchase RPC-XXX consistent with Amazing! Co. products, and then open RPC-XXX-1 and handle RPC-XXX-2 irregardless of warning or knowledge of RPC-XXX-2’s anomalous effects.
RPC-XXX-2 refers to 25-30 glass marbles painted to resemble known astronomical bodies within the solar system. RPC-XXX-2 instances measure █ cm in diameter, and weigh 5.5 grams, and correspond to a Mohs hardness rating of 5.5. When RPC-XXX-2 is removed from RPC-XXX-1, RPC-XXX-2 will manifest its anomalous properties. RPC-XXX-2 instances, when thrown or rolled, ignore friction and continue to gain speed even if contact is made with another object. RPC-XXX-2 will usually shatter upon reaching a speed of 30 m/s. Fragments of RPC-XXX-2 will then embed in soft objects and cease movement. Fragments of RPC-XXX-2 will then embed in soft objects, but will continue to shatter otherwise. Further breaking down of the material eventually creates a coarse powder that continues to accelerate at an exponentially increasing speed. Coming into contact with the powder via skin, or inhalation is invariably fatal due to the speed at which the particles within are moving.
RPC-XXX-2 instances that continue to fragment are then identified as RPC-XXX-3. RPC-XXX-3 refers to a cloud of RPC-XXX-2 fragments that behaves in a manner similarly to stellar nebulae. The size of RPC-XXX-3 instances varies based on the amount of RPC-XXX-2 that has progressed to this stage, and can measure between 2 cm and ████. RPC-XXX-3 instances then heat up to a temperature of 10,000° K within ██ seconds. RPC-XXX-3 will then form miniature T-Tauri stars which undergo rapid stellar evolution, quickly progressing to main-sequence. RPC-XXX-3 instances that progress to this stage are identified as RPC-XXX-4.
RPC-XXX-4 measures between 0.3 and 1 cm. Temperature and luminosity of RPC-XXX-4 cannot be recorded due to the destructive nature of RPC-XXX-4. RPC-XXX-4 will begin nuclear fusion and continue to move erratically. RPC-XXX-4 quickly forms and depletes its outer layers of hydrogen, forming a core of denser materials until the star eventually collapses. RPC-XXX-4a refers to RPC-XXX-4 that undergoes a supernova event, quickly expelling all of its mass. RPC-XXX-4a is then considered neutralized with leftover superheated particles showing no anomalous movement or increase in speed. RPC-XXX4b refers to an instance of RPC-XXX-4 that crosses its Schwartzchild Radius and becomes a miniature black hole. RPC-XXX-4b is theorized to have an event horizon of 0.000001 µm, but due to the nature of its transformation and speed this cannot be confirmed. RPC-XXX-4b continues to move erratically, absorbing matter over the course of 10 seconds until it ‘vaporizes’ and is considered neutralized. See Addendum XXX-01 for more information. This whole section undermines the inherent horror of a marble that can create a black hole. You talked alll about how dangerous these objects are, that all these things have to be taken care of, and the payoff is a tiny black hole that disappears after 10 seconds.
Discovery:
RPC-XXX was discovered on 4/25/19██ following an incident in the local ███████ supermarket in ████, Mississippi, when RPC-XXX-1 was breached and RPC-XXX-2 was handled, resulting in 42 casualties and 21 deaths. MST X-Ray-6 (‘Annulifiers’) were dispatched to the location following the deaths of 2 Authority informants and the news coverage of the event. RPC-XXX’s latent anomalous properties were discovered after X-Ray-6-1 accidentally nudged an instance of RPC-XXX-2 with their boot, resulting in 2 more casualties. After visual confirmation of Amazing! Co. GoI markings and confirmation of associated cognitohazardsmemetic hazards, MST X-Ray-6 applied anti-memetics to the entire township of ████ and distributed standard wide-area-coverage amnestics via aerosol dispersal to the entirety of Forrest County.
Testing Logs:
TESTING LOG XXX-01
Date: 5/2/19██ Time: 08:00
Objective: Discover the exact events required to trigger RPC-XXX-2’s effects.
Subject: D-1172. Subject was given appropriate anti-memetic treatment prior to test.
Instruction: D-1172 was instructed to jostle an intact instance of RPC-XXX-1 without opening the bag.
Result: RPC-XXX-2 remained inert despite moving within the confines of RPC-XXX-1.
TESTING LOG XXX-02
Date: 5/9/19██ Time: 08:00
Objective: Discover the exact events required to trigger RPC-XXX-2’s effects.
Subject: D-2153. Subject was not given any anti memetic effect.
Instruction: D-2153 was instructed to handle and open RPC-XXX-1, and handle RPC-XXX-2.
Result: As soon as D-2153 made visual contact with RPC-XXX-1, subject displayed eagerness to open RPC-XXX-1 and handle RPC-XXX-2. Upon handling RPC-XXX-2, D-2153 attempted to start a game of marbles. As soon as an instance of RPC-XXX-2 left D-2153’s hand, the instance immediately began rolling despite a lack of assistance from D-2153’s hand. After 1 minute and 12 seconds had elapsed, the instance of RPC-XXX-2 had reached a recorded speed of 30 m/s and shattered upon hitting the wall of the enclosure. Fragments of RPC-XXX-2 then continued to bounce off of the walls of the enclosure, causing damage to RPC-XXX-1 and harming D-2153 through multiple lacerations. After 1 minute and 53 seconds, all RPC-XXX-2 instances had been freed from the bag due to the damage caused by the initial RPC-XXX-2 fragments. D-2153 was then presumed dead. Test was terminated after RPC-XXX-2 fragments destroyed all recording hardware and damaged the reinforced glass of the observation room. RPC-XXX-1 and RPC-XXX-2 were destroyed via application of caustic spray.
TESTING LOG XXX-03
Date: 6/9/19██ Time: 08:00
Objective: Discover the exact events required to trigger RPC-XXX-2’s effects.
Subject: One (1) Unmanned ground vehicle (UGV) equipped with video and audio recording hardware, and equipped with a single claw for handling objects.
Instruction: Unmanned ground vehicle (UGV) was operated by Researcher Dr. Young. Dr. Young was instructed to open RPC-XXX-1 and handle RPC-XXX-2.
Result: Umanned ground vehicle was inserted into a reinforced testing enclosure and handled the RPC-XXX-1 instance that had been placed prior. After successfully opening RPC-XXX-1, RPC-XXX-2 manifested its anomalous properties and began moving. Due to the unmanned ground vehicle lacking the reaction time and dexterity possessed by living beings, Dr. Young was unable to stop RPC-XXX-2’s movement. Testing was terminated after 2 minutes and 5 seconds, where RPC-XXX-2 had fragmented and damaged the unmanned ground vehicle’s recording suite.
Researcher’s Notes: “Interesting. It appears that RPC-XXX-2 responds to any movement outside of RPC-XXX-1. It appears that once RPC-XXX-1 is breached, it causes a cascade event.” -Dr Young.
TESTING LOG XXX-04
Date: 6/16/19██ Time: 08:00
Objective: Discover RPC-XXX-2’s limits.
Instruction: RPC-XXX-1 is to be breached, and no less than one (1) instance of RPC-XXX-2 is to be removed via application of robotic appendage equipped with slip-resistant material. RPC-XXX-1 and remaining RPC-XXX-2 instances are to be destroyed via caustic spray to reduce damage. Remaining RPC-XXX-2 instance is then to be dropped and robotic appendage is to be withdrawn. Cameras and recording equipment are to be reinforced.
Site Director’s Notes: “I appreciate your willingness to continue testing of RPC-XXX, but due to the destructive nature of this anomaly I am asking you limit all testing to 1-5 instances. The loss of three enclosures and one of our umanned vehicles is unacceptable. I do not need to remind you that we do not fully understand RPC-XXX yet and complications that arise from testing, that could destroy the site, are far too likely using all instances.” -Site Director Klaus ███████
Result: RPC-XXX-2 instance was successfully extracted from RPC-XXX-1. RPC-XXX-1 and remaining instances were destroyed via caustic spray as per instruction. At 5 minutes and 30 seconds post application of caustic spray, RPC-XXX-2 instance was then dropped and appendage withdrawn. The instance began to move erratically and shatter after reaching 30 m/s, at 7 minutes and 18 seconds. RPC-XXX-2 continued to fragment until it reached a powder-like state at 8 minutes and 3 seconds. Temperature sensors detected an increase in testing enclosure that exponentially increased with acceleration of RPC-XXX-2 powder.
RPC-XXX-2 was then observed to behave similarly to stellar nebulae. During this time, particles of RPC-XXX-2 (given the designation of RPC-XXX-3) were observed to begin forming a T-Tauri class star at 10 minutes and 43 seconds. RPC-XXX-3 instance then progressed to a main sequence star at 12 minutes and 4 seconds, with a theorized classification of K. RPC-XXX-3 was then designated RPC-XXX-4.
RPC-XXX-4 quickly consumed all of its outer layers and formed a dense core at 15 minutes and 3 seconds. Visual and audio recording equipment failed at this time due to extreme damage caused by RPC-XXX-4.
At 17 minutes and 3 seconds, RPC-XXX-4 [DATA EXPUNGED], resulting in the destruction of Site-11’s east wing and 9 instances of containment breach. See Addendum XXX-01 for more information. Why would the Authority think something is so dangerous to know they remove it from the database completely, only to explain it 1 paragraph later? Honestly these testing logs aren't very enjoyable to read through and only manage to restate information that we can gather through the rest of the document. Literally the only time something happens in these testing logs that hasn't been talked about in the previous parts of the article, the new information is exounged in a different area.
Addendum-XXX-01
During Testing of RPC-XXX on 6/16/19██, RPC-XXX-4 underwent a supernova event. The resulting temperatures and sudden gravitational shift damaged or destroyed eastern areas of Site-11. RPC-XXX-4 appears to behave consistently with current stellar bodies, and is theorized to become a miniature black hole should multiple instances of RPC-XXX-2 contribute mass to RPC-XXX-3, then RPC-XXX-4. Classification has been raised to Black, and new containment procedures are to be put in place effective immediately. Testing is halted until further notice.
-Global Director ███
This is a much better way of showing the audience the potential danger of this object, showing, how the less dangerous version of SCP-xxx-4 destroyed half of a site, and then saying yeah, but it could've been a whole lot worse
I hope I didn't come off as too critical, I really like your ideas, but I feel like the presentation of them almost ruins the basis of the idea. I tried to not criticise your formatting, mostly because my copy of your text won't have a lot of your strikethroughs.
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