I don’t remember how I got here, Just the serums and syringes
Uncapitalize "Just"
They were all of various shapes and sizes all painted with different color
change to: They were all of various shapes and sizes, all painted with a different color
Very liquid
Fix this, what does it mean?
harder then we thought
change "then" to "than"
“termination?”
Capitalize first letter, I'd also suggest to include more information than only one word.
“No, put him in a cell, we could use him for testing, we surprisingly made some progress with him.
Add a " to the end.
As I walk through desolate dungeon I could only think
Change to: As I walk through the desolate dungeon, I could only think
Hoping I have not lost my humanity or at least not yet.
Change to: Hoping I have not lost my humanity, or at least not yet.
This tale is kinda good. The problem is, its very short and doesnt have much detail, things that tales require. Many periods could be replaced with commas, and the phrases reworded to sound better.
Overall, you just need to write more about this tale. Its very promising, but its lack of detail lets it down. I hope you work on this so it comes out as a good work.
