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Due to its sheer size, numbers, and changing location, there is currently no ideal containment method for RPC-XXX. Instead, resources are focused on suppressing critical information.
To assist with the identification of possible SSAEEs, MST Delta-4 ("Garcas") operatives embedded within meteorological agencies worldwide must reroute crucial data to MST Whiskey-7 ("Space Force"), which will attempt contact and gather intelligence following criteria. Furthermore, MST Oscar-5 ("Web Nerds") personnel remains tasked with the removal of all media related to the anomaly, in addition to the creation of misleading advertisements and black propaganda to obfuscate and discredit all sensible details.
Critic’s Recommendation: I recommend you combine the two paragraphs.
Due to its sheer size, numbers, and changing location, there is currently no ideal containment method for RPC-XXX. Instead, resources are focused on suppressing critical information. To assist with the identification of possible SSAEEs, MST Delta-4 ("Garcas") operatives embedded within meteorological agencies worldwide must reroute crucial data to MST Whiskey-7 ("Space Force"), which will attempt contact and gather intelligence following criteria. Furthermore, MST Oscar-5 ("Web Nerds") personnel remains tasked with the removal of all media related to the anomaly, in addition to the creation of misleading advertisements and black propaganda to obfuscate and discredit all sensible details.
In the event that there is exposure to the general population, contact the nearest Site Director for further instructions.
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In the event that there is exposure to the general population, the nearest Site Director is to be contacted and standby for further instructions.
This event will now be referred to as an SSAEE.
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These events are designated SSAEE.
Critic’s Comment: Would it sound better to say “SSAE Event” or “SSAEE”? It’s up to you.
An SSAEE is thought of as a time of estrus for this species,
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At the time of writing, an SSAEE is theorized to be a time of estrus for the species,
Most of the acquired knowledge about this species surrounds the males.
Critic’s Note: Change “this” to “the”
Overview: in-field samples gathering.
Critic’s Note: Capitalize the “i” in “In”
Critic’s Comment: I think you gotta add more context to the final log.
Critic’s Review: I love the idea. In its current state I’d give it a 3/5, but if you work on it even more you can assure a 4/5 or 5/5 from me depending how good it is.