I will answer the Guiding Question at the end part of the crit
RPC-052 The Lid (1)
Containment Protocols:
The monument itself is to be researched via robots resistant to mechanical frost build-up
Or you could just say "equipped with heating devices"
Description:
RPC-052 is a 3m x 1m x 0.33m rectangular runestone1,
I suggest placing the footnote after the comma becuase if not, it looks kinda wierd
located in the wilderness of Greenland at latitude ███ longitude ███.
located in the wilderness of Greenland, at latitude ███ longitude ███.*
The stone itself is made of solid quartz and analysis indicates that it has stood in its current location for roughly ███ years undisturbed
The stone itself is made of solid quartz, and analysis indicates that it has stood in its current location for roughly ███ years undisturbed* Also, is there a reason to black out the years it has stood up? Same with all other redactions, i dont like them, but thats a personal thing
May thine fields remain bare,
And the fruits within slumber in peace,
So that order be restored throughout.
For what gluttons dost not chaos reign supreme?
¨¨I think they would look good on Italics**
Discovery:
RPC-052 was discovered in winter of 1971
Month? Day?
Addendum 052.1:
I really like this "interview" very based
RPC-052 The Lid (2)
Containment:
Nothing to complain here aside from, maybe make the red a little more bright? Because when its a lot of red text, it kinda bleeds together
Description:
Really like the aproach you taking with this
Discovery:
Given Incident 052-1 and the consequent messages from Head Researcher Gilligan
Given Incident 052-1, and the consequent messages from Head Researcher Gilligan*
by Containment Division
by the Containment Division* **You could aso say "by Containment's Engineering Component"
Incident 052-1 and Transferal Requests:
Something seems fishy… btw your footnote block code is fucked up at the end
RPC-052 The Lid (3)
Containment Protocols:
RPC-052 is not be moved from its original position for whatever reason
The removal of RPC-052 from its original position, no matter the reason, is strictly prohibited.*
Description:
Given the extreme risk associated with RPC-052, tests with breaking containment will not be conducted.
As in: Given the extreme risk associated with RPC-052, tests involving it's removal from containment are not to be conducted*?
Incident 052-2 and RPC-052-2 Message:
Your footnote is fucked again at the bottom
Guideline Questions and Final Review:
1- How fitting is the title of the article now that you've read the whole thing? Very much, it hits you at the very end, but its cool.
2- How obvious is it what RPC-052 actually does? would you leave more up to imagination or less, or would you keep it as is? At first i tought it was making the researchers crazy with how much they fucking hated the rock and their desire to move it to a site, so i believed the ideological hazards was starting to get them, but turns out i was wrong. I think if you stop to think for a minute you can guess what it does, its cool.
3- The entire article hinges on the build-up to the beta-black classification and the cryptic information given as justification. how well was this accomplished? would you cut or add anything? I think you did a fantastic job, i really liked the buildup and the things you came up with.
4- Corrupted text as attempted in addendum 052.2 of the final revision is known in some cases to be laughably bad or cringey, how was the execution in this article? would you remove or add anything to make it more unsettling/authentic? Im not gonna lie, i hate corrupted text in any sort of form, and i believe a short, cryptic message at the end would work even better.
5- How well do the images in addendum 052.2 of the final revision tie up the article and highlight the risk of RPC-052 breaking containment? They do a pretty good job, yeah.
Overall i loved this article. fantastic work, 5/5