Magic Artefacts Catalogue
for defending against an aggressive pack of Spire Elves
defending them*
A ceremonial pendant made of gold, painted with a representation of the Saint of Life, Astrae
Of which religion does this Astrae belong to? Same deal with the monks
A curved iron plate, halfway buried, extending for five metres into the air;
and extending*
In the end, the true question is, what does the bucket do?
Regions
above the remainder of the Ashwood jungle
As far as I know there is still a jungle in Ashwood?
Creatures and Races
I think the bestiary page looks really clunky and fugly, maybe some quoteboxes or tabs would help?
Cult of Saints, a variety of miscellaneous Pagan-like superstitions
The "Pagan" part is kinda uhhhhhhhhhh, aren't all this religions considered paganism? And paganism related to what? Christianity? On a fictional setting?
Final Review:
This is a great collaborative article, which im glad to be a part of, it adds so much little stuffs to the lore, i'm happy it exists.
5/5 don't ever add the elves part
Nothing new I can say aside from Swine Men are the superior species on Cair Aisling and every other race should be subservient to our hammy overlords.
Very interesting collab for dumb stupid high fantasy cringe. 5/5 because I dont feel snarky today
cant believe that fucking proto likes the swine parts, something viz and i did together.
literally this day is a blessing
This honestly looks pretty good. All the crit that I could give seems to have been give but Tarb already. Really, can’t find something that threw me off in here. Good job.
Marco Marchi B. Mark
Beginning as just a few, small observation towers, the Watchdom grew to be a militaristic province, with a distinct and independent social order.
remove commas
other than that i see this as just fine!