RPC is a 128 MG flash drive
Do you mean a "128 MB flash drive" instead?
sensorial and kinetics anomalies
kinetic
The severity of these experiences depend upon
depends
gross words per minute, or GWAM.
That should have been GWPN for "gross words per minute" and "gross words a minute" for GWAN
Individual's upper extremities are forced backwards off of the keyboard
backward
Subject is unable to speak and has difficulty breathing.
Should be using plural forms like the rest of the table
Supplemental oxygen and appropriate face gear is worn.
are
One subject's fingers of his left had slip off
left hand (?)
slipped off
Subject suffers a fractured left humerus and sprained left wrist with friction burns across the lower and upper left arm.
The subject
3rd degree friction burns
3rd-degree
You should specify why the Authority wouldn't have just used a robot instead of human subjects in-universe, mechanical assisted-arm sure seems to work just fine.
I also don't understand the USB port ended up taking 5L of human blood, as it doesn't really seem to connect to the subject in anyway. The subject was exploded and its not like you are implying any part of him was somehow "downloaded" into the USB, and the blood doesn't seem to represents anything seeing as how the file can be deleted regardless.
I do like the article, the idea of "typing speed affecting you literally", reminds me of that one online typing game that is represents your progress with cars.
Additionally on removal, RPC gave resistance, as if weakly fused with the port.
Suggestion for better pacing: "Additionally, RPC gave resistance on attempted removal"
… I've been trying for a while to think of any blatant issues with the article itself, but ultimately it all comes to a subjective perception of "lack of content". On one hand I feel reluctant to suggest expanding the article, as its current state is pretty tight and good, but on the other I feel like it doesn't have much to offer save for a slight impact from the incident report.
I think (if I understood correctly what was going on) that you could probably expand on the ending by maybe letting the "child program" mature (… or maybe rot?) for a little while without impacting too much the tightness of the article, but that's about it.
Other than that — great job with clinical tone and organization. This feels like an article I'd read from a 4chan post from 2007, but the way it's executed is so much better.
Thanks, I made these changes and will work on adding a bit more substance to it.