Very nice. I think that you should make a comment here with a link to the image you used to you don't risk getting a copyright strike. Just FYI.
This RPC is like an alternate take to SCP-087, but still different enough to be enjoyable. +1
Since english is not my first language, grammar errors might occur in which case I beg you to either fix them on the spot or alert me.
You are free to edit this page so long as you are correcting something.
While most of the article was written well, I didn't particularly like the mention of 228, and the "subtle" jokes on the exploration logs. Aside from that, well written and the picture adds a lot to this article.
Terrifying! I absolutely love sewers and this horrifying piece is exactly what I want from an article involving them. One of my favorites and I'd go so far to say this is a must read. 5/5
Love it, only a small thing to nitpick at is the end of the exploration logs, in both circumstances of the END LOG part: 1 has a gap in formatting separating the body from the END LOG part, and 2 had the END LOG part look different from the one i saw in 1.
But apart from that minor nitpick, nice little article, i'll give it a 4
Man, this isn't good at all, is ok to take another concept even from the SCP Foundation but at least give it a different treatment, it just felt like reading 087 but in a sewer instead of a room of stairs, at least do something like "The light seems to have an unknown origin but every 300 meters the light strength declines until absolute darkness".
Also, since is a linear path maybe the CSD personnel could be tied to a long long rope so the Authority can take the corpses back or see if there is something impeding their return, or ask the CSD to do something different, like drawing messages on the walls, make holes in the walls from inside, use a gun against RPC-108-1, etc.
Is just the base for something that could be a good RPC, but try to make it feel more different from SCP-087.
I wrote this article 2 years ago, I haven't changed it very much since, mostly grammar. What's expected from an article, however, has changed for good.
I don't want people liking this article because it would mean this is still an acceptable piece of writing, which it really isn't. Despite all that, I won't rewrite it until it goes below the deletion threshold, simply because I want this to stay, as a testament to how it used to be when we first started on this site, as I wouldn't approve this article nowadays either.
Either way, thanks for at least reading this old, rough piece of mine.
Even though this a total ripoff of SCP-087, there are still a couple subtle-ish details I loved in this that made it worth reading. Especially this line:
CSD-1546-1 runs approximately 5 kilometers in absolute darkness, despite the fact his expedition only continued for 2 kilometers inside RPC-108.
On the other hand, I find this line unintentionally hilarious:
The subject stops to have a drink before continuing forward.
It sounds like the CSD drank from the black liquid on the ground. :P
I would be willing to rewrite this, but I'm assuming the author would rather do that. I'd rather not wait for it to fall under the deletion threshold though; if you want to keep it as an artifact, why not just make this version an -ARC?
I request permission to recreate and replace the image, if that would be helpful, since we haven't found the source for the current one. Better safe than sorry, right?
Ouch.
This kinda hurts because I love tapping into my childhood fear of dark, shitty sewer places where the only place you can go is deeper into the dark, but this just won’t do. Tone is kinda messed up and there’s a lot of repetitions that feel jarring, and the logs are a mess, dialogues feels stiff and unrealistic. However, it is a salvageable concept.
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