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I will say, it's a very cool idea for an Utility RPC has a dangerous threat inside. Adds that whole "Too good to be true" mentality. I give it 5 stars.

by Another VoidAnother Void, 02 Apr 2020 01:10

Hello, I'm Another Void. I Recently joined a day ago, or was it 2 days ago? Anyway, I'm very new here. So a lot of things here are confusing to me. I hope my time here is pleasant for everyone.

Introduction by Another VoidAnother Void, 02 Apr 2020 00:15
BallYTBallYT 01 Apr 2020 20:13
in discussion Hidden / Per page discussions » RPC-339

Originally made as an entry for the j2020 contest.

Thanks to CyberHeartCyberHeart and big thanks to VizloxVizlox for the crits.

by BallYTBallYT, 01 Apr 2020 20:13
Ashtor3thAshtor3th 01 Apr 2020 17:43
in discussion Hidden / Per page discussions » A Bat Out of Hell

Art is by me, my discord is Ashtor3th#0849 if I forgot anything.

by Ashtor3thAshtor3th, 01 Apr 2020 17:43
VizloxVizlox 01 Apr 2020 13:59
in discussion Hidden / Per page discussions » RPC-949

That sums up how I feel pretty well. It just felt a bit weak throughout and the ending wasn’t strong.

by VizloxVizlox, 01 Apr 2020 13:59
MuinaisetMuinaiset 01 Apr 2020 12:42
in discussion Hidden / Per page discussions » Table

Although I admire the dedication behind this entry, particularly the attention to detail reflected in the page's formatting, I cannot in good faith upvote an entry as nonsensical and content-free as this. It's well beyond my comfort zone for avant-garde modern art. 2/5 if I could vote on it.

by MuinaisetMuinaiset, 01 Apr 2020 12:42
MuinaisetMuinaiset 01 Apr 2020 11:48
in discussion Hidden / Per page discussions » RPC-949

This walks a fine line between being charmingly weird and off-puttingly stupid, but I think it ended up closer to the former. 4/5 because I enjoyed reading it, but it lacked the impact to elicit a perfect score from me.

by MuinaisetMuinaiset, 01 Apr 2020 11:48

April Fools 2020 contest entry. Big thanks to Von PincierVon Pincier, JokahJokah, CyberHeartCyberHeart, and JimmyJohnJohnsonJimmyJohnJohnson for the feedback! Hope the article turned out good.

Draft thread here:

JimmyBoyHahaJimmyBoyHaha 01 Apr 2020 04:48
in discussion Hidden / Per page discussions »

God fucking dammit

oh yeah yeah

by JimmyBoyHahaJimmyBoyHaha, 01 Apr 2020 04:48
JimmyBoyHahaJimmyBoyHaha 01 Apr 2020 04:25
in discussion Hidden / Per page discussions » RPC-949

I wrote this article for the April Fools 2020 contest. It won. Very cool, very epic. Saw the prompt "write about tables" and wrote this in a few days. You may see more table articles from me in the future.

Thank you to Prototype_ToasterPrototype_Toaster, TheSwedishChefTheSwedishChef, VizloxVizlox, TheGreatTarbolin69TheGreatTarbolin69, and ICFDICFD for their criticism.

oh yeah yeah

by JimmyBoyHahaJimmyBoyHaha, 01 Apr 2020 04:25

So I was writing an RPC on the Sandbox thing. Everything was ok, then I clicked on the "save" button, thinking it was a button to save my draft so I can work on it later. But for some reason, it loaded it up, and I can't edit it. Did I do something wrong? I don't know how this Sandbox thing works.

Help with my Sandbox. by Another VoidAnother Void, 31 Mar 2020 22:41
Re: Morningstar
NvayethNvayeth 31 Mar 2020 20:23
in discussion Writing & Drafts / Drafts » Morningstar

Not too much to say from me; I quite like the way you chose to present his interaction with the entity in that cell. On top of that, grammar punctuation and spelling are solid. The only things that need work (in my opinion, of course) are perspective presentation and a little bit of editing to make it more… compelling? It's a little dry as-is, because for me it's very difficult to relate to someone so completely detached from themselves. It feels like he doesn't really care what is happening to him (or otherwise) through most of the piece, and that can be boring to read.

So, to summarize: Well-written on the technical side, and also pretty good on the abstract/creative. I'd suggest going back through it with a fine comb to get the proper tense of words in place so you're not constantly switching between present and past- it's not necessary, but it will improve the flow of your story. I also suggest giving your character a little more character, have him inwardly express his fears or desires through the story. It would make him a little more relatable, and accentuate the horror aspects of the piece.

Hope that helps!

astra inclinant, sed non obligant

Re: Morningstar by NvayethNvayeth, 31 Mar 2020 20:23
Re: NV-Anderson
CroalCroal 31 Mar 2020 19:08
in discussion Writing & Drafts / Drafts » NV-Anderson

You should go onto the discord and offer to trade critique with others.
You're asking people to take the time to help you. You should offer them the same.

Re: NV-Anderson by CroalCroal, 31 Mar 2020 19:08

Unfortunately, no. There isn’t a way to keep light theme on between pages. I haven’t been able to find a way to have that feature with how Wikidot is set up.

Re: Light vs dark site theme by VizloxVizlox, 31 Mar 2020 14:21

Nice story

You can add a ink to the Site-016 page using…

[| Site-016]

I can't find any spelling or grammar errors.
Looks good.


Update your comment, you wrote this based on what you read before my changes on the 13th.

by GrammerPoliseCheifGrammerPoliseCheif, 31 Mar 2020 06:27

As per our discord chat…

I've tried fiddling with your suggestion, as I do value and seriously consider your feedback. However, I wanted to demonstrate with incident 1 that incidents don't always have to be major breaches, disasters leading to tragic body counts. And incident 2 was supposed to reveal a previously unknown function of the plant that it can do this emergency function to save the baby's life upon detecting host death.

I can't bring myself to delete those, but I have reordered the collapsibles in order of priority: Discovery -> Interviews -> Defects -> Incidents.

Hope that improves the flow of the article.

I couldn't see a search feature for the forum, so I'll ask. Is there a way to maintain the light theme of the site across pages? I know I can toggle between light and dark themes with the triangle at the top right, but navigating to a new page resets back to dark theme.

Light vs dark site theme by psychiadukepsychiaduke, 31 Mar 2020 04:54
RedtideRedtide 31 Mar 2020 03:38
in discussion Hidden / Per page discussions » RPC-306

Its a bit rough around the explanation of the RPC itself, and i feel this shouldn't be Omega since it seems the Authority has been successful in keep knowledge contained about it so far.

Otherwise, nice overall story, i'll give it a +

by RedtideRedtide, 31 Mar 2020 03:38
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